Scipts

Today, we spent the morning reading through everyone’s scripts to the idea that they had pitched the previous lesson. We played a script editor for everyone and evaluated spelling mistakes, punctuation, and layout, how it could be improved etc. We wrote down all our notes whilst reading through them and got time to tell our thoughts of each other scripts. They were some scripts better than others and help to see what was realistic and could be put into production.

A few people gave me some suggestions to how I could improve the idea for example instead of Beau and Harvey going out it should be Beau really loves Harvey and she wants to meet him but when she turns up he is actually meeting someone he likes and wants to be with. Another suggestion was they thought it would be good if the whole thing was a dream but in then end Harvey wakes Beau up and realises it was a dream.

The next lesson, I made a second draft of the script. I made some minor changes of words needed to be added and also to add a bit more to the story so because it wasn’t quite longer enough. I made some more links to the balloons in two of the scenes to see the resemblance. I also took advice from some of the feedback from my reading the scripts and thought it would be more effective and work better.

The lines of the songs could be an issue with copyright. They thought when Harvey read the message the audience should actually see the message because it would connect to why he is annoyed and link in later on.